Hey Courtney, I’m on part 8 right now but I wanted to leave you a comment earlier. Somewhere around part 5 or so I started thinking “Shouldn’t they be hungry and exhausted by now? They woke up after who knows how long of being shackled up, their adrenaline must be running and they’ve been walking around for a couple hours now trying to escape?” and then no less than two sentences later you addressed those very issues. I was really pleased with that, and since then you’ve continued to do a great job addressing realistic, if more mundane, concerns which makes for a more believable, higher quality story.
I am really enjoying it. You’ve more than piqued my curiosity. It is a strange set of circumstances and doesn’t seem to follow a predictable plot. I’m really interested to know the motivations behind whoever put them in this situation. I’m excited for the rest!
LOL, Carlos, you called me Courtney. 🙂
Anyway, glad you’re liking it and that it’s addressing your questions adequately. It IS just the rough draft, so of course it’s still a bit rough. I know where it’s going, just haven’t mapped out every single step along the way. I’m hoping for a full-length novel out of this one.
haha!! whoops! Sorry Becca.
Yes, I am liking it a lot. As I read further today and Kel “remembered” about her incident the day before with the apple, I was impressed because that incident had also slipped into the back of my mind with the rest of what was going on. You did a good job keeping the reader (me) caught up in the story so that something as strange as that would become something to be remembered just like it did for the character…this “rough draft” is a hell of a great start. Keep going, I can’t wait to see where it goes.
Chapter 11 was a really cool scene. I liked how you separated them both and gave them a chance to think privately about the other and then brought them back together. Poor Kel; it’s gotta suck to have the only person you know be mistrusting of you, especially in the crazy situation she’s in.
Can’t wait for part 12.
Thanks for the comments, Carlos. 🙂
There are so many ideas about the story in my head right now, I just need to organize them! Glad to have you along for the ride. 🙂
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Hey Courtney! LOL – in another world, you’re Becca, right?
This is a wonderful tale! I’m all caught up.
There is so much to like about this novel-in-the-making. Hints of allegories, creative use of the senses and, of course, the alien Zappers.
Keep ’em coming!
Thanks, Mitch. I’m glad you’re enjoying it! Writing this thing has been quite a ride — and I’m loving it.
Thanks for reading!
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